2007-05-16 [Deleted user]: -Sits down with her drink and crosses my legs, reading along as you add-

2007-05-16 [Slaughter™]: Well it's done :]

2007-05-16 [Deleted user]: Good stuff, definately.

2007-05-16 [Scene*star Sammi]: awww cute :] some grammatical errors but nothing a little proof reading won't cure :]

2007-05-16 [Slaughter™]: Hmm, where?!? I was really afraid of those because I honeslty hate reading something that's incorrect -.-

2007-05-16 [spikey]: very very good, -moves the thing in his pants, so it dosnt show-, and also having paragraphs would help arrange the story and put more emphisis on things, hey have you also thought of making this a home page, and have indidvual pages, or like diffrent experences

2007-05-16 [Deleted user]: By the way, I love your banner.. I totally want one.

2007-05-16 [Slaughter™]: Possibly, If I ever write another story ^_^

2007-05-16 [spikey]: hell you could host a place for people to write stories and have them all link to this page, for example have the persons name and then links to their stories underneath their name

2007-05-16 [spikey]: i did one little change, you had "With that being sad we both fell asleep." i just changed sad to said, and a few abd to and

2007-05-16 [Slaughter™]: ohh, thank you :]

2007-06-20 [Slaughter™]: Story Moved;; Page Edited.

2008-04-28 [Agent47]: I like the story ^-^ I saw it on the story of the day wiki.