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2007-11-30 [Your Brompton Cocktail]: read and comment plzz
2007-12-03 [Lady Di]: i'm taking off the password since other people can't see it. it will still be editable by only you, however, so no one will mess with your story
2007-12-03 [Your Brompton Cocktail]: lol i didn't mean to do that lol
2007-12-03 [Lady Di]: s'all good, i've done it before too
2007-12-04 [Rushuna]: May I make a suggestion? Its a good story, but everything runs together.. The parts where Brier is thinking, shouldn't be in quotations. And the conversation between Brier and Demitra should flow better. Look at one of my stories and see how the conversation parts are... I think that might help^^
But like I said, its a good start and I can't wait for the next part to come out^^
2007-12-04 [Your Brompton Cocktail]: yah it was a real life story that hadnt happened yet but now has lol ( she was coming over and i had been dreaming about it ) ok i will try with part two
2007-12-04 [Rushuna]: I see. That's cool.. all of my stories are real too.. Well aside from Just A Dream Anyways.. but that's kinda self explanatory, lol
Ok^^ Good luck^^
2008-11-23 [Dreams of a savage nature]: wow....
2008-11-23 [Your Brompton Cocktail]: *smiles* if you like that check out the night after people say its mutch mutch better!
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